高考读后续写素材积累---《追风筝的人》

高考读后续写素材积累---《追风筝的人》
Hassan's face brightened."Good,"he said. He lifted our kite, red with yellow borders, and, just beneath where the central and cross spars met, marked with Saifo's unmistakable signature. He licked his finger and held it up,
tested the wind, then ran in its direction—on those rare occasions we flew kites in the summer, he'd kick up dust to see which way the wind blew it. The spool rolled in my hands until Hassan stopped, about fifty feet away.He held the kite high overhis head, like an Olympic athlete showing his gold medal. I jerked the string twice, our usual signal, and Hassan tossed the kite.

Caught between Baba and the mullahs at school, I still hadn't made up my mind about God.But when a Koran ayat I had learned in my diniyat class rose to my lips, I muttered it. I took a deep breath, exhaled, and pulled on the
string. Within a minute, my kite was rocketing to the sky. It made a sound like a paper bird flapping its wings. Hassan clapped his hands, whistled, and ran back to me. I handed him the spool, holding on to the string, and he spun it quickly to roll the loose string back on.

At least two dozen kites already hung in the sky, like paper sharks roaming for prey. Within an hour, the number doubled, and red, blue, and yellow kites glided and spun in the sky. A cold breeze wafted through my hair. The wind was perfect for kite flying, blowing just hard enough to give some lift,
make the sweeps easier. Next to me, Hassan held the spool, his hands
already bloodied by the string.

Soon, the cutting started and the first of the defeated kites whirled out of control. They fell from the sky like shooting stars with brilliant, rippling tails, showering the neighborhoods below with prizes for the kite runners. I could hear the runners now, hollering as they ran the streets. Someone shouted reports of a fight breaking out two streets down.

I kept stealing glances at Baba sitting with RahimKhan on the roof, wonderedwhat he was thinking.Was he cheering for me? Or did a part of
him Enjoy watching me fail? That was the thing about kite flying: Your mind drifted with the kite.

They were coming down all over the place now,The kites, and I was still flying. I was still flying. My eyes kept wandering over to Baba, bundled up in his wool sweater.Was he surprised I had lasted as long as I had? You don't keep your eyes to the sky, you won't last much longer.I snapped my gaze back to the sky. A red kite was closing in on me--I'd caught it just in time. I tangled a bit with it, ended up besting him when he became impatient and tried to cut me from below. (478 words)
设计问题
1. In the first two paragraphs , how did they fly kites ? (设计意图：前面两段出现了大量的放风筝的动作描写，很生动很形象，设计这个题目能让学生去找去品味那些丰富的动作细节描写，感受语言的美）
2.Why did the author keep  glancing at Baba? （挖掘作者动作背后的含义，他的动作是他的心理活动的体现，也是他性格的体现。让学生根据表层的文字的阅读学会剖析人物性格，养成批判性思维能力）
参考答案
1.They flew kites very well.
Hassan: licked his finger ; held it up, tested the wind,  ran in its direction held the kite high over his head., tossed the kite.spun it quickly to roll the loose string back on....
I: jerked the string twice, our usual signal, and Hassan tossed the kite....took a deep breath, exhaled, and pulled on the string....clapped his hands, whistled, . ran back to me ; handed him the spool, holding on to the string...
2.He wondered whether his father was satisfied with his performance. He was not a confident boy, but he was eager for his father’s acceptance.
细节分类：11句动作描写
1.We hopped the fence that surrounded the barracks, skipped over a little creek, and broke into the open dirt field where old, abandoned tanks collected dust. （动作）A group of soldiers huddled in the shade of one of those tanks, smoking cigarettes and playing cards.
2. I was walking behind him, humming, trying to imitate his walk. I watched him swing his scraggy leg in a sweeping arc, watched his whole body tilt impossibly to the right every time he planted that foot.
3.At parties, when all six-foot-five of him thundered into the room, attention shifted to him like sunflowers turning to the sun.
4. I cried all the way back home. I remember how Baba's hands clenched around the steering wheel. Clenched and unclenched. Mostly, I will never forget Baba's valiant（勇敢的） efforts to conceal the disgusted look on his face as he drove in silence.
5. I pressed my ear to the closed door.
6.He rose to his feet and walked a few paces to his left.
7 Because Hassan stood with his arms wide open, smiling, waiting for the kite.
8.He licked his finger and held it up, tested the wind, then ran in its direction-on those rare occasions we flew kites in the summer, he'd kick up dust to see which way the wind blew it. （神态、动作细节描写）
9.I handed him the spool, holding on to the string, and he spun it quickly to roll the loose string back on.
10.He eyed me up and down.
11.Karim collapsed on the floor and rolled around fighting for air when Baba finally let go.
细节分类：5句外貌描写
1. He was a squatly man with a shaved head and black stubble on his face.
2. Now he was walking toward us, hands on his hips, his sneakers kicking up little puffs of dust.
3. He was dressed in a cotton shirt and blue slacks, a red silk tie and shiny black loafers. He smelled of cologne and his blond hair was neatly combed back.
4. He was so tall now--I stood on my toes and still just came up to his chin. The Bamiyan sun had toughened his skin, and turned it several shades darker than I remembered, and he had lost a few of his front teeth. There were sparse strands of hair on his chin. Other than that, he had those same narrow green eyes, that scar on his upper lip, that round face, that affable smile.
5. She was dressed in an olive green dress with a black shawl wrapped tightly around her face against the night chill.
细节分类：1语言描写
"You! The Hazara! Look at me when I'm talking to you!?“ the soldier barked. （语言）He handed his cigarette to the guy next to him, made a circle with the thumb and index finger of one hand.（体现人物当时的态度）
细节分类：10句场景描写
1.He turned back to the microphone and said he hoped the building was sturdier than his hat, and everyone laughed again. When Baba ended his speech, people stood up and cheered. They clapped for a long time. Afterward, people shook his hand. Some of them tousled my hair and shook my hand too. I was so proud of Baba, of us.（从他人反应的角度描述主角：他爸爸的演讲是成功的，受人欢迎的）
2. At least two dozen kites already hung in the sky, like paper sharks roaming for prey. Within an hour, the number doubled, and red, blue, and yellow kites glided and spun in the sky. A cold breeze wafted through my hair. The wind was perfect for kite flying, blowing just hard enough to give some lift, make the sweeps easier. （放风筝的场景描写，从各个角度，立体描述）
3.  We were upstairs in Baba's study, the smoking room, when I told him what Mullah Fatiullah Khan had taught us in class. Baba was pouring himself a whiskey from the bar he had built in the corner of the room. He listened, nodded, took a sip from his drink. Then he lowered himself into the leather sofa, put down his drink, and propped me up on his lap. I felt as if I were sitting on a pair of tree trunks. He took a deep breath and exhaled through his nose, the air hissing through his mustache for what seemed an eternity I couldn't decide whether I wanted to hug him or leap from his lap in mortal fear.（动作与场景细节描写：作者回家后与父亲之间的交流）
4. The water was a deep blue and sunlight glittered on its looking glass-clear surface.
5. Then I glanced up and saw a pair of kites, red with long blue tails, soaring in the sky. They danced high above the trees on the west end of the park, over the windmills, floating side by side like a pair of eyes looking down on San Francisco, the city I now call home. （场景、比喻）
6. Blue skies stood tall and far, the sun like a branding iron searing the back of your neck. Creeks where Hassan and I skipped stones all spring turned dry, and rickshaws stirred dust when they sputtered by.（场景、比喻）
7. Somewhere, a branch snapped, an owl hooted. The wind, soft and cold, clicked through tree branches and stirred the bushes that sprinkled the slope. And from below, the faint sound of water tumbling through the valley.
8. By three o'clock, the rain had stopped and the sky was a curdled gray burdened with lumps of clouds. A cool breeze blew through the park.（天气）
9. The sun was beginning to set, glittering red through the cracks between the ramshackle buildings.（景象）
10. "All right. Here I go.?I took off running, my sneakers splashing rainwater from puddles, the hand clutching the kite end of the string held high above my head. It had been so long, so many years since I'd done this, and I wondered if I'd make a spectacle of myself. I let the spool roll in my left hand as I ran, felt the string cut my right hand again as it fed through. The kite was lifting behind my shoulder now, lifting, wheeling, and I ran harder. The spool spun faster and the glass string tore another gash in my right palm. I stopped and turned. Looked up. Smiled. High above, my kite was tilting side to side like a pendulum, making that old paper-bird-flapping-its-wings sound I always associated with winter mornings in Kabul. I hadn't flown a kite in a quarter of a century, but suddenly I was twelve again and all the old instincts came rushing back.（优美段落：再放风筝的场景）
细节分类：6句情绪描写
1.  I was overcome with such sudden guilt that I bolted to the bathroom and vomited in the sink.Because when he was around, the oxygen seeped out of the room. My chest tightened and I couldn't draw enough air; I'd stand there, gasping in my own little airless bubble of atmosphere. （情绪的细节描写）
2.  It scared me a little, seeing a grown man sob.
3. I want to tear myself from this place, from this reality rise up like a cloud and float away, melt into this humid summer night and dissolve somewhere far, over the hills. But I am here, my legs blocks of concrete, my lungs empty of air, my throat burning. （感受与情绪，具体化）
4. My throat aches and my eyes sting with sweat, each breath is like inhaling fire, and I think I am weeping.（哭的描写）
5. I hear a whimpering and realize it is mine, my lips are salty with the tears trickling down my face. （哭）
6. Hesitated. Took the string. My heart quickened as I spun the spool to gather the loose string. We stood quietly side by side. Necks bent up.
细节分类：17句神态描写
1. Baba's stony eyes bore into mine and, just like that, I wasn't laughing anymore. "I mean to speak to you man to man. Do you think you can handle that for once?“
2. I closed my eyes, pressed my ear even harder against the door, wanting to hear, not wanting to hear.（神态描写）
3. Then he paused, as if on the verge of adding something. He weighed his words and cleared his throat.（神态描写）
4. A look of surprise passed across Assef's face, briefly, and disappeared.
5. She smiled, unconvincingly, and blinked. （神态）
6. I remember turning my face up to the sky, squinting, breathing like the world was running out of air.(神态描写）
7. He lit a cigarette and tucked it between the remaining two fingers of his left hand, the one resting on the steering wheel. Keeping his black eyes on the road, he stooped forward, picked up the screwdriver lying between his feet, and handed it to me.（神态）
8. Farid opened his mouth, almost said something, reconsidered and said nothing. He slumped against the wall, muttered some thing under his breath, and crossed his mutilated foot over the good one. His accusing eyes never left me.（神态）
9. I took the keys, stunned. （神态）
10 I forced myself to look at Hassan, but his head was downcast, his shoulders slumped, his finger twirling a loose string on the hem of his shirt.（情绪细节描写）
11  A look of disgust swept across his rain-soaked face. It was the same look he'd give me when, as a kid, I'd fall, scrape my knees, and cry. It was the crying that brought it on then, the crying that brought it on now. "You're twenty-two years old, Amir! A grown man! You...? he opened his mouth, closed it, opened it again, reconsidered.（表达情绪的优美段落）
12  A few more awkward minutes passed, and a light sweat formed on my brow, my upper lip.
13  He held my glance, then looked away, his face set like stone. His eyes were still lightless, I saw, vacant, the way I had found them when I had pulled him out of the bathtub.（神态描写）
14  Behind the glasses, tiny eyes like black peas flitted from me to Farid.
15  Sensed him standing there, listening, hesitating, caught between suspicion and hope.
16  His shoulder muscles tightened under my grip and, for a moment, I thought he'd keep squeezing Zaman's neck anyway.
17 He wiped his face with the sleeve of his shirt. It burst a bubble of spittle that had formed on his lips. He buried his face in his hands and wept a long time before he spoke again.（神态）
丰富的语法结构 15句
1 drowned in the deafening roar （分词）
2 Standing in the cold basement, I felt watched by eyes blinking in the dark.（分词）
3 I hear chatter, muted sobbing, sniffling, someone moaning, someone else sighing, elevator doors opening with a bing, the operator paging someone in Urdu.（平行、分词）
4 Baba pocketed the keys, pulled me out of the rain and under the building's striped awning. （名词动词化）
5 I stood on tiptoes, saw nothing behind the window but shadows.
6 He got mad and hit me harder, and the harder he kicked me, the harder I laughed.（状语从句）
7 "What about me, Baba? What am I supposed to do?“I said, my eyes welling up.（分词）
8 That was when I understood the depth of the pain I had caused, the blackness of the grief I had brought onto everyone, that not even Ali's paralyzed face could mask his sorrow. （修辞）
9 Wrapped around his neck were Baba's hands.（倒装）
10 Our ears became accustomed to the whistle of falling shells, to the rumble of gunfire, our eyes familiar with the sight of men digging bodies out of piles of rubble.（省略）
11 Words were exchanged, brief and hushed.(形容词当状语）
12  People had started to gather in clumps, teacups in hand, eyes glued to the sky.（独立主格）
13 I lay on the side of the dirt road next to a rocky trench, looked up to the gray morning sky, thankful for air, thankful for light, thankful to be alive.（重复）
14  When you tell a lie, you steal someone's right to the truth. When you cheat, you steal the right to fairness. （排比）
15  I ran. A grown man running with a swarm of screaming children. But I didn't care. I ran with the wind blowing in my face, and a smile as wide as the Valley of Panjsher on my lips.
I ran.（结尾） （重复，耐人寻味）
练一练
公园闪闪发光（shimmer），铺满的雪多么新鲜，白得多么耀眼，令我目眩神迷。雪花无声地洒落在白色的枝头上。
答案
The park shimmered with snow so fresh, so dazzling white, it burned my eyes. It sprinkled soundlessly from the branches of white-clad trees.